Triquerta – Rogark (Rasmus)
Next up is Rasmus’s character. English description equals English comments from me.
Background
Rogark was at young age abandoned by his clan to fend for himself. He survived for a while by ambushing travelers on the road. Until he by accident revealed his magical abilities to some guards who called in Magickia to solve the problem. The mages apprehended Rogark and recognized his potential in the magical arts. Seeing as he was only a child they brought him with them back to Magickia to train him as a mage.
Rogark has fairly bright skin compared to other orcs, he has orange hair which is usually gathered in a ponytail. His face is very smooth and childish which looks down right ridiculous when he gets mad. He gets mad very easily and could in worst case enter a state of blind rage where he poses a threat to himself and his surroundings. He enjoys solving puzzles or spending his time practicing astrology. He is angered at the orc clan for abandoning him and has made it his goal to prove to himself and them that he didn’t need them anyway. He believes that by becoming a powerful mage he can achieve that.
Vision
Rogark kept his bright skin and his Orange hair which he still keeps in a ponytail except that it now reaches all the way down to his waist. His beard is gathered in two braids. He wears a thick robe in magickias colors under which he reveals his muscular torso, covered in tattoos. On the left side of his torso he has a scorch mark. As he person he is known to be calm and polite and always keeps his temper under control even though he is sometimes looked down on for being a “simpleton” and “dimwitted” because of his straight forward almost reckless use of magic.
In battle he is known to be ferocious and very dangerous, when he goes berserk and wreaks havoc on his enemies. He manipulates earth with ease and creates walls, pillars or even deadly spikes to reform the battlefield into his liking. By combining earth and fire he creates meteors to hurl at his enemies. He uses wind to keep his enemies at a distance as well as protecting himself with a wind aura.
Your background is quite pale but sufficient. It’s traditional and obvious.
Orc’s seldom, very seldom have light hair. Most orcs have deep green or blue or black hair colour. But your magic affiliation can be accepted as the reason to this since physical traits from magic is not that rare even though they are uncommon ta that scale. But then again, elementarists within the Orcs are uncommon. I approve.
In your vision you’ve done exactly what I want you to. In the beginning I was a little worried that you’ve just made a “big” version of the first but when I read calm and polite I was very proud and relieved. That is a radical change from the young hothead. You’ve also included a good scorch mark which I highly approve of.
The only thing is that even here your vision is very pale. I can see it before me but it’s too little. Bearly sufficient. Even so it’s okay and I cannot see anything that you could change other than add more to your visions appearances. Clothes, armour and eventual weapons.
That is if you want to have those. Maybe you meant for him to be a unarmed fighter mostly using his ferocious magics and strength?
Just clarify your thoughts with your fighting style and I’m content.
Awesome concept by the way =D